Over the years, I’ve read hundreds of novels and short stories. One mistake sticks out the most: showing the story instead of telling it.
Telling is when a writer states their story rather than shows it through the details. An example would be: There was mist over the lake. Showing your story is when actions describe what’s going on. An example would be: White mist from the rushing water roamed everywhere, brushing up against the land.
Some people preach that every sentence should expand and show your story, but I don’t think that has to be the case. Most well-written stories have showing and telling sentences mixed throughout. However, showing sentences still exist more than telling ones. It’s difficult to tell when you have the right amount of showing vs telling.
A good way to tell though is by letting someone read the story. Readers can tell when the flow is off. Writers, who see their own story all the time, know what it should say, which makes it difficult to catch mistakes.
Even though it’s hard to tell, there are ways to tell if your story is telling rather than showing. Here are some:
- Using words that end in -ly a bunch
- Tell: Slowly, John stepped into the room.
- Show: John crept into the room.
- Using start to or begin to
- Tell: Jane started to sing.
- Show: Jane’s voice sang through the air.
- Using next or then
- Tell: Then Jacob grabbed the book.
- Show: Jacob grabbed the book.
- Using to-be verbs too much
- Tell: Jayne was jumping in a circle.
- Show: Jayne jumped in a circle.
- Using there was
- Tell: There was mist over the water by Jace.
- Show: Mist roamed over the water by Jace.
As a writer, showing and not telling has always been a struggle. Every writer—no matter how experienced—runs back into this issue. If you struggle with this concept, it’s not a bad sign. It takes practice.
Is there a common mistake you see more than this? Comment below!
4 thoughts on “#1 writing mistake”
I know I’m guilty of this at times. I have to revise like crazy to improve myself from telling to show! Cool little article 🙂
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Thank you! I’m glad you liked the article!
& I’m guilty of this all the time too. My editors always point it out to me.
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